Ellie’s Unofficial #gutgaa Small Press Query H0p Submission

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Okay, I’ve had a fellow writer help me totally rework my query for Warder. Let me say it needed it! But now I’m worried it’s too generic.

This draft is current as of 9:30 pm eastern time,  on Sunday, September 23.

PNR, 108k

Current query:
At twenty-eight, Mona Kubrek finally fits in when she’s chosen to be Warder, a job where she helps keep magic hidden from the human world and mortals safe from those who work it. The position highlights her skills, or lack there of, as only elves that can’t create their own spells but can manipulate others’ magic are picked for the task. Life is pretty good… until she accidently springs, then evades, a death trap. Now she’s dodging spellbound-shifters intent on finding her and dealing with her body’s reaction to the half-elf shifter investigating the destruction left in the wake of the shifters’ pursuit.

Cart Dupree wants only to find the culprit behind the recent bridge collapse, do his job, and get back to his pack. From the start of the investigation, Mona dogs his steps. She’s reckless, especially when she puts herself and other lives in danger by jumping in feet first without a thought to her safety. But’s not her actions which get shifters killed, it’s the madman who sends them after her and spells them to get Mona or die.

Tacitly agreeing to ignore their mutual attraction, Mona and Cart band together to solve the case. The only information they have about the magic user who’s sending the shifters after Mona and thus decimating the local Were pack, are cryptic messages from a mythical being. As each successive attempt to kill the pair comes closer to succeeding, and the death toll for shifters rises, the two race to decipher the clues before they become the next victims.

Previous version:
At twenty-eight, Elfen Mona Kubrek is finally fitting in when she’s chosen to be Warder, a job committed to keeping magic hidden from the human world and mortals safe from those who work it. Only elves that can’t create their own spells but can manipulate others’ magic are chosen for the task. Life was perfect until she accidently sprung, then evaded, a death trap. Now she has spellbound-shifters intent on finding her and a very distracting half-elf Were investigating the destruction being left in the wake of the shifters’ pursuit.

Cart Dupree wants only to find the culprit behind the recent bridge collapse, do his job, and get back to his pack. From the start of the investigation, Mona is dogging his steps. She’s reckless, especially when she’s putting herself and other lives in danger by jumping in feet first without a thought to her safety. But’s not her actions which are getting Weres killed, it’s the madman who’s sending them after her and spelling them to find her or die trying.

Against their better judgement, Mona and Cart band together to solve the case. The only information they have about the magic user who’s sending the shifters after Mona and decimating the local Were pack, are cryptic messages from a mythical being. As each successive attempt to kill the pair comes closer to succeeding, and the death toll for shifters rises, the two race to decipher the clues before the next victims are them.

Older version:
At twenty-eight Mona’s finally fitting in after she’s chosen to be a Warder. The job fulfills her need to protect and is something few people can do, only elves who cannot create their own spells but can manipulate others magic can take on the task. Life was perfect until spellbound shifters became intent on finding her and a very distracting half-elf Were showed up to investigate the destruction being left in the wake of the shifters pursuit.

Cart Dupree wants only to find the culprit behind the recent bridge collapse, do his job, and get back to his pack. From the start of the investigation Mona is dogging his steps. She is a Warder, and he knows she is committed to keeping magic hidden, but her lack of skills and knowledge are a danger to herself and those around her. Especially when she’s putting herself and other lives in danger by jumping in feet first without a thought to her safety, never mind that no one gets hurt.

Their only information about the magic user who’s sending the shifters after Mona and decimating the local Were pack are cryptic messages from a mythical being. As each successive attempt to kill the pair comes closer to succeeding, and the death toll for shifters rises, they race to decipher the clues. Because next time the bodies might be theirs.

And the one before *that*:

Mona Kubrek couldn’t be more thrilled with her new job as a Warder – it fulfills her Elfen need to protect without exposing her embarrassing inability to create a spell of her own. She’d be having the time of her life if there weren’t shifters spellbound to capture her on her tail, and a very distracting half-elf Were investigating the destruction being left in the wake of her search for her pregnant best friend.


Cart Dupree wants only to find the culprit behind the recent bridge collapse, do his job, and get back to his pack. At the center of his investigation he finds Mona. Her Warder status may be there, but her lack of skills and knowledge are a danger to herself and those around her.  Her kind of untutored help is the kind he doesn’t need, not when she’s putting herself and others lives in danger by jumping in feet first in without a thought to her safety.


Together they must decipher cryptic messages from a mythical being to stop the magic user that’s decimating the local Were pack and stalking Mona’s best friend.  With each successive attempt to kill the pair getting closer to succeeding it’s a race to find the being behind the magic before more people die. Because the next set of dead bodies might be theirs.


Beta Readers – Now with easy to use lists! #GUTGAA

Here, it is the list(s) of authors looking for BETA readers/reading partners.

Things I learned: One pretty much EVERYONE said they’d reciprocate, so I didn’t need to have that as a question. And pretty much everyone said they had something *right now* (or very soon), which makes sense, why would you be looking for a BETA reader if you didn’t have something? D’oh! On the other hand, I neglected ask people how they wanted to be contacted so there are several blanks in the lists where that information is missing. So, if you are one of the people who has a blank and are still looking for a beta reader, you can post below and I will add it. (although with the kids sports schedule tomorrow it might not be until late).

The other thing I learned is not everyone had a clear concept of the genre of their story (trust me, I too am confused! I wrote about it here and here). So, if you seem to be listed in a category which isn’t quite what you listed it’s either because a) I merged some genres for space issues (all ‘non-earth’ fantasy including ‘high’ ‘epic’ ‘heroic’ is under fantasy/other realms) or b) I added a genre which I thought was also a good fit for your story. I did this to appeal to as broad a group as possible, but if you’re truly ticked let me know and I’ll take you off that list.

Due to space limitation I have clustered some of the genres in each age range. With three age ranges (MG, YA and Adult), ~14 genres and serious overlap for several genres (paranormal and UF being the main one) making a separate listing for each didn’t make sense. I also didn’t make a lits of what people said they’d read, however it’s pretty safe to assume authors will read in the genres they write in (if you want to check you can to back to the original posts here). EVERYONE should be listed at least once, sometimes more depending if they write for several age groups or across genres (that is everyone who posted by 11 pm on Friday, Sept 7!). If I missed you I sincerely apologize!!  Let me know and I’ll add you in.

But first, before we get to the tables, we had FOUR FIVE ! people who are NOT authors sign up to BETA read. So very cool!

I’ve cut and pasted each of their posts so authors looking for readers can hear first hand what they are looking for. Quick hint: CLICK ON NAMES AT TOP OF QUOTE TO GET TO THEIR WEBSITES/TWITTER ACCOUNTS.


Hope Markowski

1) My name is Hope Markowski. I am an 8th grader in honors English and Reading classes. I am a book reviewer on Flamingnet.com. I volunteer at my local library at least twice a week, and I am a peer helper at my school (which you need to be teacher recommended based on academic performance, etc.) I LOVE to read. I read all kinds of books, from ones that are a bit below my reading level like “The Divide” (like for 6th or 7th grade), but I really like it anyway, up to “To Kill a Mockingbird” and “A Walk to Remember”, which I am reading both right now. I *loved* the Maximum Ride series, and Immortal. I also like Meg Cabot and Margaret Peterson Haddix. I like YA fiction with some romance, and some paranormal or magic thrown in. I really like female lead characters that are kind of feisty, or ones that are a little sarcastic and make me laugh.
2) YA/MG romance (I’m not allowed to read books that have TOO much “romance” in them if you know what I mean), paranormal romance, adventure/fantasy like Maximum Ride
3) I read every day. I can easily commit to a minimum of two chapters a week. And that is a low ball park number. If the chapters are shorter, or I don’t have a lot of homework, I can probably do more. I just don’t want to commit to something I can’t deliver. I always keep my commitments.

A.M. Supinger’s:

AMSupinger (@AMSupinger)

1) My name is A.M.Supinger. One of the items on my Bucket List is to buy a house with enough room for a formal library. Right now every nook and cranny in my apartment is overflowing with stacks of books that can’t be crammed onto my bookshelves :P I live in South Dakota with my husband, two dogs, and a very sneezy cat.
2) I prefer reading YA/MG fantasy and science fiction, but I will also read adult scifi/fantasy.
3) I am already a beta for two other writers, so I would only be able to commit to one book a month. If my reading list goes down, I’ll be able to zip through novels much more quickly.



Hello all! I am a photojournalist & studio photographer from West Tennessee. When I’m not behind the camera taking pictures, I can usually be found reading. It’s my second love and I am not limited to any specific genres either. My favorites to read are mysteries, thrillers and romances (especially romantic suspense) but I will pretty much read anything that catches my attention. I can juggle more than one author at a time. I can do a chapter a week or a book a month because I make my own hours.


and FolioRoad’s


Hello! Thanks for setting this up. So many of us want to connect, it’s just a matter of finding a platform to do it!

I’d like to offer my services as a beta reader in order to help out fellow authors. I am quite obsessed with YA lit., almost entirely speculative. I love deep characters and stories that delve into the darker parts of us or society.

You can visit my blog at http://www.folioroad.com or find me at Goodreads (FolioRoad) to learn a bit more about me and what I like to read. :)

It’s hard to pinpoint a time commitment because I don’t how many people will contact me, but I read quite quickly (especially when I’m interested) and an average YA book will take me at most a week or two.

I can take one story now, but from mid-Sept to Oct I’m super busy. At the end of October I’ll have much more time to devote.

Thanks again!

ETA: FolioRoad is also an author, but loves to Beta read!

One more reader/author looking to just read (a late sign up!). Oh, and I don’t think she means for ‘hire’ as in she expects compensation but that her services are available!

Sarah J Schmitt (@SJSchmitt)

BETA Reader for “hire”

HI, I’m Sarah. I write YA and currently have two books in final stages of revisions (Thriller and Paranormal) and a third in “pre-production” (a ghost story). I would love to be a BETA reader for YA writers. I am willing to work on one book every 4-6 weeks, depending on my own writing schedule.


I have a couple of feelers out in other places too, so this list may expand later.

Now, onto the authors. 🙂 I’ve done this by youngest age range to oldest. IF you write in more than one age range OR if you write in more than one genre, you *should* be listed for each one, but I’m sure I missed a few. Just let me know if you need me to add you to a different category and I’ll see what I can do. I did track New Adult, but ended up merging the category with YA although I do realize it’s not quite the same.

AGAIN: These are authors looking for beta readers and/or to ‘exchange’ beta reads with other authors. If you want to go back and see the original comments which generated these lists, please go here.


Authors who create Picture Books (no genres for this group):

Donna Martin
Kevin Christofora
Romelle Broas


Middle Grade Authors (with seven decided not to do genres, websites should have that information, although we are missing websites):

Donna Martin
Brandon Stenger
Jodie Andrefski
Jenn B.
Connie B. Dowell
Gail Nall

Okay, I have to make a side note here: Jenn B & Connie – you both only write MG and both listed yourselves as writing in the same genre (fantasy/other realms). Empgal and Gail did the same but with adventure/mystery.


YA Authors who write Paranormal or Urban Fantasy:

Anabel G.
Wendy Knight
Liz Hellebuyck
Heather Riffle
Rhiann Wynn-Nolet
Connie Michael
Felicia Wetzig
Priya Kanaparti
Jessica Becker
Meridith Johnson
Heather M. Bryant
Margaret Alexander
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Rebecca Ethington


YA Authors who write Fantasy (Other Realms) or Speculative Fiction or Science Fiction or Dystopian:

Paula Sangare
Katie Teller
Donna Martin
Ellie Heller
Jessica (No last name)
Brandon Stenger
Blair B. Burke
Liz Hellebuyck
Anabel G.
Heather Riffle


YA Authors who write Horror/Gothic or Mystery or Historical or Contemporary (the catch all table):

Paula Sangare
Katie Teller
Donna Martin
Ellie Heller
Jessica (No last name)
Brandon Stenger
Blair B. Burke
Liz Hellebuyck
Anabel G.
Heather Riffle

(again, I merged New Adult with YA)


“Adult” Paranormal Romance or Urban Fantasy Authors:

Christie Palmer
T. J.
Ellie Heller


“Adult” Fantasy (Other Realms) or Speculative Fiction or Science Fiction or Dystopian Authors:

T. J.
Sue Ann Bowling
C. Stuart Hardwick
Brandon Stenger
Laura Stephenson
Marian M Librarian
Amy Cavenaugh


“Adult” Suspense or Thrillers or Mystery or Historical or Women’s Lit Authors:

David Kentner
Amy Cavenaugh
Hunter Emkay
Dean Pace-French
Blair B. Burke
Tasha Seegmiller


Authors who write Erotic or BDSM or GLBT:

Kathryn R. Blake
Dean Pace-French

One last category I didn’t do was non-fiction, I think there were just two authors. I’ll track them down another day. I hope everyone finds a Beta Reader here, or a crit group over at Deana’s! They are invaluable!!

Meet & Greet Ellie Heller – GUTGAA Blogfest!

Deana Barnhart
Gearing Up To Get An Agent Blogfest is kicking off with a meet and greet. What is GUTGAA? Starts out with a pitch polish and moves on to pitch contests (AGENTS) and a twitter pitch event and… a month of activities centered around one thing: helping people polish and shine to get the attention of an agent. Deana Barnhart, the fabulous organizer, has a list of FAQ here along with links to the schedule and the agents/small presses/authors who will be helping out. It’s a GREAT opportunity to learn a LOT, even if you don’t make it into the any of the contests.
So here we go: Questions for the Meet and Greet
Where do you write? At home, typically on the recliner couch in the family room, but over the summer I found myself up in my room to avoid the distraction the TV provided. Kids 🙂
Quick. Go to your writing space, sit down and look to your left. What is the first thing you see?  The sun streaming through a stained glass piece which we bought to go in our first house. The perimeter is from an old church window and the artist did some free-form work in the interior making a interesting mix of geometry and curves
Favorite time to write? First thing in the morning when the kids are at school. Or late at night when they’ve gone to bed. And that’s late! I have teens.
Drink of choice while writing? Mostly iced tea, despite the ensuing breaks *that* causes.
When writing , do you listen to music or do you need complete silence? When I am writing to create a new piece/first draft, it’s typically silence. Editing/revising it’s a mix.
What was your inspiration for your latest manuscript and where did you find it? My current work (not what I’m pitching) is a new adult fantasy. Several years ago Julie Czerneda had a contest on her SFF Newsgroup for a flash fiction piece, under 1k. I had been dealing with a lot of death in the family at that point so I ended up writing what is a core chapter for my current piece.
What’s your most valuable writing tip? Make sure you have good beta readers and/or critique group. And generally this doesn’t mean simply handing your piece around to family and close friends. You need someone who is going to be upfront about what works and what doesn’t. On Wednesday Deana will be offering writers the chance to connect with other writers to be help each other out as critique partners. BETA/Critique Group Connect – Anyone interested in making some serious writer connections can come to my blog and post in the comments section what they’re looking for and I will try my best to make a writer connection for you. If you don’t do anything else for this blogfest I *strongly* urge you go to sign up and find someone you can work with. I think this is so, so very important I offered to host some here, although she didn’t take me up on it.
Wait, that’s it? Oh, right short bio. I’m a mother of three, two of whom are teens (one who just got his permit!!) and the other is ten going on seventeen (my little girl). We share our house with two large dogs, when I said I my only criteria was any dog we got had to be larger than our 18 lb cat, I hadn’t anticipated getting seventy pounders but I wouldn’t trade them for the world. I have one novella published and typically write fantasy stories – high fantasy, contemporary fantasy, paranormal romance.
Clicking HERE to go to the main page for the blog fest and find more wonderful authors who have signed up. Because LINKY doesn’t work for me (it’s a wordpress thing) I’m going to post the link to the blog of the person who signed up after me for the Meet and Greet as well: Mere Joyce  : A writer and a librarian, blogging about writing, librarianship, and whatever else catches my fancy!  Stop by and say hello!

Queries, Critiques and Agents: Contests, Thoughts and Getting Out There

I’m sure they’ve always been there, but in the past six months I’ve found a number of places online where I can get my query/first page critiqued and/or in front of an agent. Just this week there are, and have been already (and it’s only Tuesday!) a lot of opportunities.

First, a BIG, HUGE CAVEAT. It’s very important that you are able to a) take criticism, since many of these contests have a open posting forum where others can comment on your work and b) have a strong sense of your voice so that you are able to pick out what suggestions work for you and not end up with an over processed / lifeless piece of writing which tries to please too many people at once and reads like a text book. OTOH, when you have several people comment ‘I didn’t get/don’t understand/didn’t like’ a particular part you need to be able to step back and revise it and not, as I’ve seen, keep it in there because you thought it was a clever turn of phrase indicative of your voice. Unless you want your voice to appear muddled, get over it. Mini-rant over.

Back to what’s out there right now. Brenda Drake  is having a workshop on queries (contest ends midnight Thursday!). It’s time for another workshop. This one is for the dreaded query letter. I’ve gathered some talented writers and editors to help me critique forty query letters. All genres and finished or not quite finished manuscripts welcomed. We’ll choose forty names from the Rafflecopter, and critique two a day for five days on our blogs. Ms. Drake and her other blog hosts mostly write YA, something which may or may not affect your desire to enter.

Over at Chuck Sambuchino’s Guide to Literary Agents Blog there’s a ‘Dear Lucky Agent’ contest for MG writers open until Aug 27. Welcome to the 11th (free!) “Dear Lucky Agent” Contest on the GLA blog. This is a recurring online contest with agent judges and super-cool prizes. Here’s the deal: With every contest, the details are essentially the same, but the niche itself changes—meaning each contest is focused around a specific category or two. So if you’re writing middle grade fiction (see exactly what this term means below) novel, this 11th contest is for you! (The contest is live through Aug. 27, 2012.)

The annual WriteonCon for writes of YA, MG and PB (picture books) is going on right now. While some of the contests are closed, there are still a couple coming down the pike AND there’s forums where you can post your query, first page and first five pages. Why? Well apparently there are Ninja Agents who like to lurk about the boards and read them. 🙂 All you have to do is use our forums the same way you should be using them anyway (because they’re AWESOME) and you could have a super-cool Ninja-Agent critique your work. And even if they don’t comment on your work (they promise they will try to comment/critique on as many as they can) you can learn SO much from the comments they leave for others. Because really, the best part about the forum is that you can go read the feedback whenever your schedule allows. They actually have hour time slots scheduled for agents, so there’s still opportunity to get out there! PLUS, they have a great area to find critique partners, but more on that later.

Already passed but places to keep an eye on going forward:

Miss Snark’s First Victim – Always a good site for getting out in front of agents there’s (mostly) monthly Secret Agent contest and other goodies which pop up during the year. For instance last week she had a ‘first line grabber’ contest. Her entry window for the August secret agent was yesterday – I got in at #11. Fingers crossed, it’s my first time attempting. And will be, for secret agent at least, for another six months – she’s placed an understandable restriction given the popularity of her blog.

Mother. Write. (Repeat). has a number of different contests throughout the year. Yesterday’s Agent Inbox was full within twenty minutes of opening. Set up to show the thought process of an agent I’d love to get in the next one. Please keep in mind that THIS CONTEST ISN’T FOR THE FAINT OF HEART. I’ve encouraged The Agent to treat the entries exactly as he or she would a normal batch of queries. Essentially, The Agent will be answering the question, “How much of the entry did you read, and if you didn’t read it all, why did you stop?” I think this process will be instructive for all of us, but if you enter, you need to be prepared to hear exactly what The Agent thinks of your query and first page.

Cupid’s Literary Connection had a number of fantastic events this past spring (Writers Voice!!), mostly geared for YA writers but some which were open to all. They’ve taken the summer off and are gearing up for an event this fall. Can’t wait!

Last, but not least, there’s Query Shark. Not a contest, per se, but a site you can submit your query to for feedback. Query Shark critiques fiction queries. You have to send a query to the shark for it to be considered. There is a checklist for how to do that on the post labeled “If You Want Your Query Posted, Read and FOLLOW These Directions” Queries are acknowledged IF THEY FOLLOW THE DIRECTIONS. This can take several days if the QueryShark is swimming about in the Sea of Writing Conferences. If you have not followed the directions, or if it’s immediately clear you have not read the archives your query is discarded. Not for the faint of heart, but then much of this business isn’t.

Oh, shoot, I was going to go into opportunities to find beta readers/ critique partners, but I guess I’ll save that for another post. So, go out there! Dip in the pool and get your toes wet. The water may be shocking at first, but you’ll get used to it soon and it’ll make you a better swimmer in the end.

If you know of more contest, leave a comment and I’ll add them to the end. I kinda feel like I’m missing a biggie 😉 . Plus, I seem to have gotten in a loop with many YA contests. I wonder if there are SFF ones or Horror ones too? Hmm…

Summer, Turns Me Inside Out or Ellie Writes Too (when she can)

And yes, that is a reference to a Cars song.

With kids home, then off to camp at vastly different schedules and home again and off again…well, you get the gist. I’m barely getting any work done on my fantasy novel, much less blogging.

On the other hand, I do like what I’m churning out, which is nice.

Here, a Tuesday Teaser of a bit. I was really happy with this bit. Yes, it’s still rough:

“I knew she would die. But hearing it–” He paused. Several deep breaths later he continued. “At least he’s not going to use her as he did the others.”

Faint images from the vision clung to the edges of Ilia’s memory. The mage did not kill quickly or cleanly. Arilla has been spared that at least.

“I’ll help you find her body.” The words were out before Ilia could stop them. They hung in the air of the room as if offering her the chance to unsay them, suspended while the others looked at her, shocked.

So, I’m off to try to write this next scene. At least until it’s time to walk the dogs or feed the cat or …

First Lines: My Favorites. What are yours?

As anyone who has read my favorite books posts knows, I’m a big fan of Jennifer Crusie.

She is one of *the best* at opening lines.

Here, from Faking It, which I recently re-read and was struck again by how awesome this line is:

Matilda Goodnight stepped back from her latest mural and realized that of all the crimes she’d committed in her thirty-four years, painting the floor-to-ceiling reproduction of van Gogh’s sunflowers on Clarissa Donnelly’s dining room wall was the one that was going to send her to hell.

Seriously, how much great character development is there in that bit? Okay, it is a tad long by current standards, but it works so very, very well.

Here’s her start to Welcome to Temptation:

Sophie Dempsey didn’t like Temptation even before the Garvey’s smashed into her ’86 civic, broke her sister’s sunglasses, and confirmed all her worst suspicions about people from small towns who drove beige Cadillacs.

And finally, Getting Rid of Bradley (’cause that all I could easily put my hands on). This last one I’m fudging a smidge. Since it’s dialog, I’m including the bits before and after the tag because it’s all one thought, even if it’s not one sentence.

“I’ve never known anyone who was stood up for her own divorce before,” Tina Savage told her sister. “What’s it feel like?”

Yeah, she’s a pro.

I did find several Regencies with excellent first lines (Julia Quinn rocks here too!), but decided to try to stick with a more contemporary setting. Think I’ll save those for another post.

So, what are your favorite first lines? And I do mean line, I looked at my SEP (Susan Elizabeth Phillips) and didn’t fare so well (okay, I only found one book unpacked and on my shelf and none on my kindle so it was a very small sample).

Would love to see some more examples. I’ll add them to this post and credit them back to you too.


From my pal Suzie Ivy :

I LOVE all the authors you’ve mentioned. Mine goes way back but it’s always been my favorite. Linda Howard’s Mackenzie’s Mountain “He needed a woman. Bad.”

Six Sentence Sunday, Warder, another Start

I hate the start of my stories for the first several drafts, it takes me forever to get them where I’m happy with them – once I figure out where in the story I want to start.

Here, I’m still not sure. I’ve tried to pitch this several times and it’s not flying so I’ve redone the start. I’m starting with backstory/action from the immediate past, which I don’t want to show, but which I’m hoping isn’t too long and sets up the mood for the story. Sigh, we’ll see. With only six sentence would you want to read more?

Mona stared blearily at the cell phone ringing on her coffee table. An hour and a half was not enough sleep, not after almost getting killed this morning. The memory of the ground heaving under her feet, the cheek-stinging cold as she scrambled away flooded back, jerking her awake. Training my ass. Warder Smythe, like her, could see and manipulate other’s spells, but could not create his own workings.


Certainly not the set spell she’d barely escaped from, despite his claim the body-crushing stone monoliths which had almost trapped her were a test.

So, yes? no? (suggestions?) Sigh, good news is this is just about complete!!

The end of an ERA (for me)

(this is attempt six at a start, let’s hope it takes).

First, as I’ve said many, *many* times I love my crit group, ERA. And I’m not the only one, KevaD also comments here on how great having a solid critique group is.

But I just left the group, after having been involved since shortly after the inception.

Not because of any thing any members did. But because my time is getting crazy and only looks to get more crowded as we head into summer and out-of-school madness with the kids.

Thing is, in my experience, a solid critique group  is more than just posting pieces and commenting on them. It’s the chit chat & camaraderie which the members engage in, in addition to the quality of the critiques, which make the group viable. I feel like I have barely time to write and could not commit to the time needed to be involved at a level I feel I would need to be involved to be part of the group.

Part of it too, is that the group is Erotic Romance Authors. So while I’m always up to critiquing a hot scene 😉 , that’s not really what I write. Sure, I have the occasional ‘hot’ scene if (when!) the hero and heroine have sex the first time in my paranormal romances, but after that initial one, not so much. When I write in other genres, such as fantasy or even YA fantasy, sex is off the pages in the former and non-existent in the latter.

While I’ve gotten some great feed back, this group was never a great fit. When faced with a time crunch, much as I hate to leave the group (some of these writers I’ve known for over ten years through previous critique group incarnations) it was time.

Being the wonderful group they are, I have an open invitation to re-apply (if they have room and if I veer off to write steamy romances). In the mean time I’ll be plodding along, working with beta readers (not nearly the same, but uber helpful), and trying to stay on top of life, much less my writing, over the summer.

On the other hand, if you are not a newbie (preferably with at least one publication under your belt – in this instance self pubbed does not qualify), write *hot* romances and are open to reading and critiquing all levels of heat and combinations of partners (very important as there are several m/m and menage writers), you might want to keep an eye on the ERA portal to see when/if they post they’re accepting membership applications. I highly recommend them!

Whew, now that’s done, it’s back to writing!

So, with the family event behind me (barely), it’s back to writing. With only four weeks until school is out here are my goals:

1). Finish the last bit of rewriting to change from first person to third. Yes, I am still working on that project.

2). Evaluate which story I will work on next.

Oh, wait, oops. That’s not right! I have to finish up my short for the ERAuthors anthology. Yikes.

Okay, new list:

1). Finish up erotic short for anthology

2). Finish the last bit of rewriting to change from first person to third. Yes, I am still working on that project.

3). Evaluate which story I will work on next.

Unfortunately the summer is not conducive to writing, with kids home, etc. but I’m going to make a stab at it.

I also need to catch up on Cupid’s Literary Connection The Writer’s Voice contest, check out twitter (haven’t been on in a week!) and facebook… lots of distractions before I settle down to write. Not to mention I still have family in town until tomorrow. Hmm, thinking the writing won’t start until mid-week, the good news being I can catch up with the other stuff before then.

I hope. There’s a lot of stuff in my triberr feed!!

SSS – Start of Bett’s Story, erotic short

There are a couple of calls out right now I’m working on. One is for my critique group, ERA. I’m also thinking of sending in a submission to a Seaside Smut anthology Lucy Felthouse is editing, to see if I might get in that one.

Info on the Seaside Call:

Smut by the Sea: The Anthology will be a collection of Stories, Pictures and Poetry with a Saucy Seaside feel edited by The Northern Birds Lucy Felthouse and Victoria Blisse.

The Smut By The Sea Anthology will feature stories from a variety of genres, but they must have that overall “Seaside” feel, either in location or style. If you’d like some clarification before submitting your story then please Contact Us.

Length: 4,000 to 6,000 words
Genres: Any
Heat Levels: Any
Ending: Any
Orientation: Any
Submissions Due: June 1st, 2012


So, to get in the mood, six sentences from my first draft. Very safe for work. 🙂

The sounds were soft here at the top edge of the barrier island. After the trains and traffic at home even the occasional seagull’s cries seemed quiet amidst the shushing of the waves against the shore. The weekend was to be a getaway from their usual haunts, a change of pace for both of them.

As Monroe explained, with the beach house his buddies owned free for the weekend, and unseasonably warm weather, they’d be foolish not to take the opportunity. Monroe seduced her with promises to disconnect from his office, to work on connecting intimately with each other. So Betts, hoping the weekend would provide the pivot their relationship desperately needed, agreed.